In this episode I look at the first page of a listener's story with author Nate Crowley and we suggest ways to improve it. What is too much information, and what is too little? How can you employ the art of the telling detail? If you'd like to read Nate Crowley's new Warhammer 40k novel, THE TWICE-DEAD KING, you can grab a copy here: https://www.4tk.co.uk/the-twice-dead-king-ruin-hb.html He's also on Twitter here: @frogcroakley And you can support the show via my Ko-fi page: www.ko-fi.com/timclare