In this episode I look at the first page of a story submitted by a listener and suggest ways to make it better. We talk about the concept of the narrative present, abstract vs concrete writing, and word order in your sentences. If you want to support me & read some stuff I've done please check out the Death Of 1000 Cuts Bookshop. There's a selection of books for writers, & some books by me: https://uk.bookshop.org/shop/deathof1000cuts Please check out my latest book, COWARD: Why We Get Anxious & What We Can Do About It, which is available in hardback, ebook & audiobook (narrated by me): https://www.amazon.co.uk/Coward-Why-Anxious-What-About/dp/1838853103/ Support the show by dropping me a few beans: www.ko-fi.com/timclare And you can get in touch via the 'Contact Me' link on my website: www.timclarepoet.co.uk And here, at last, is a link to the Death Of 1000 Cuts Discord server as promised: https://discord.gg/Gr7nNU3jjv