The Gunshot Silenced

It's a weird order to put this information in, the gunshot would have had to happen before the clang. Why is Will running over open ground when he said there's a skeleton of a bus 20 yards behind him? And shortly after the first shot, his guardian angel sixth sense pretty much left him for dead. Wow! The entire clause formed purely from cliches, achievement unlocked. I imagine getting shot is primarily a surprise. Rather spools it if you spend 17 words setting it up. Another one. We are leaving Will's POV to give us this zoomed in description of the bullet hitting him. So we don't experience it as he experiences it, we get this clinical