How Do I Fix a Wordy Pitch?

Mistake number one is that the pitch is too wordy. You only have one paragraph on the back cover of your book to hook someone's attention. On amazon, you have about 400 characters and one paragraph brak before amazon slaps a read more the rest of your description. So how do you fix a wordy pitch? Well, when i go through some one's pitch I tend to cut about 50 % of the words.