Is There a Discipline to the Prose That Needs to Be Pushed More?

i think what i find unusual about this book as there are flickers of what i think of as really true talent and that other parts tit just seem so a, the ear just seems in destruction. It's not strange that you would draft this like that's what everyone's drafts looks like. But it seems so odd to me that someone who has that ability to write this paragraph would publish the essay in this state. I mean, it totally makes sense in a draft, but then wouldn't you kind of read it and push, bring us the new image,. or tighten that sentence, or kind of cutthe section that feels a little now, self indulgent would be one word for it