How to Trust Your Audience and Your Reader

The first sentence of this scene should be cut. It says both men look to bend the other to their will to his will and you don't even need that. If you write a story that has ten guys You know on a on a ship and there's no female presence, it's gonna have a limited audience. And so what you do is you're setting up your foreshadowing a Relationship that may or may not develop later on.